出出国老师点评:新GRE考试作文得分要点
同9月3日那场G考比,上周日(10月23日)的考试带给他们的是好心情。
他们整体感觉都不错。每人基本上都抽到了自己较为熟悉的题目,并且很好地控制了考场上的写作节奏,字数也大都在400~500之间。
我培训过的每个学生,我都会非常有信心地告诉他们,在掌握了文章的分析切入点和论证方法后,只要英语语言表达能力上没有致命的不足,无论是Issue还是Argument,都完全可以拿到满意的分数。所以,这些同学的考试感受实际上是我预料之中的事情。但是,GRE是个“会让人产生濒死感的考试”。顺利完成这个考试本身就已非常不易,更何况还能期待不错的成绩?因此,我为他们感到特别的欣喜。
但这些考生中最幸运的也许是一位来自云南的同学:他抽到的Issue题目岂止是熟悉,在一个月前他还和我细细讨论过!
以下就是那个曾令他不胜苦恼和困惑,而今却给他带来好运的题目:
“Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.”
照理说,这道题目不算太难。旧版GRE作文题库中就有一道和它极其类似的题目:
"There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."
但当时在给我的电邮中,这位同学感到万般纠结的是如何理解这道新G作文的写作指引(Instruction),也就是这句话:“In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position”,尤其是如何满足“be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position”的要求。
这的确是个问题。
这句话最为明确的信息是:考生的这篇作文必须要采用两面兼顾的写法,也就是我一贯倡导的Issue作文的“两面写”的策略。
这是因为,这条写作指引讲得非常明白:考生在对这道Issue题目提出自己的立场后,还必须(Be sure to)对可能被用来反驳(challenge)自己立场的最有说服力的理由和(或)例证做出回应。这实际是要求考生在作文中一定要论及反方立场,所以,必须两面写。
如果考生这时在写作中采用俗称的“一边倒”的写法,就完全不符合该指引的要求了。在其官方网站上,ETS同样清楚地强调,写作指引是考题的一部分,考生必须要依照写作指引的要求完成写作。
所以,对于“be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position”的要求,只能“两面写”。
在新版GRE的Issue写作六条写作指引中,是不是只有这一条是必须要两面写的呢?
——不是的。
除了上面提到的带有“be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position”的这个写作指引外,其它五个写作指引分别如下:
A: Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
B: Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
C: Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
D: Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
E: Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
可以看出,这六个写作指引基本上每一个都由两句话组成。前一句实质意义都不大,都是在问考生在多大程度上同意或者不同意题目中的判断而后立场。关键的“指引”意图在后一句。
首先看指引A,这个指引非常有特色。带有这个指引的Issue题目一般都会提到两个相互对立或矛盾的立场,比如类似这样的表述 - “Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts”。
正是由于题目中这两个相互对立的立场,该指引的前一句话才会要求考生讨论“which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take”;然后,它的后一句便提出要求:“you should address both of the views presented”。
显然,这已经是直白地要求考生一定要论及题目中两个彼此不同或矛盾的立场,即是说,必须要“两面写”。
我们再来看指引B。
这条指引一般出现在属于“建议类”的ISSUE题目中,比如这道Issue题库第72题:“Governments should not fund any scientific research whose consequences are unclear”。这个指引的后一句“consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy”是要求考生必须要考虑到题目中一项政策或建议的可能后果。
常识告诉我们,当一项政策建议提了出来,然后众人被要求考虑该项政策建议的可能后果时,要考虑的内容的重点只能是实施那项政策建议所可能导致的不良后果。所以,这样的题如果只单纯地谈“implementing the policy”的好处或者弊端,从逻辑上就讲不通了。因此,又必须“两面写”。
指引C所蕴含的要求同指引B是一样的。
指引C也几乎总是出现在“建议类ISSUE题目”中,比如类似这道Issue题库第80题:“Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed”。这个指引的后一句“describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous”要求考生在作文中一定要论及题目中的建议“会导致有利或不利的结果的具体情形”。初看上去,这条写作指引好像可以让我们在某项建议所导致的有利或不利的结果中选择一个进行讨论。但大家试想一下,如果别人给了你一个建议,你怎么可能只考虑该建议的一个方面呢?我们的理性以及本能都会要求我们“利·弊”权衡的。所以说,这本质上又要求我们只能采取一个“两面写”的行文思路。
好了,至此,新版GRE考试的Issue作文六条写作指引中,四条已经直接或间接地要求我们必须要“两面写”了。
最后再来看指引D和E。
这两条指引似乎没有要求“两面写”的意味。指引D说:“you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true”,言下之意是,考生既可以考虑题目中的观点成立的情形,也可以考虑其不成立的情形。至于指引E,这是一条最为普通的指引,其字面意思就是“讨论在多大程度上同意或者不同意题目中的立场极其理由”。既然如此,考生当然可以选择任意一边。
但问题是,假如对带有这两条写作指引的题目我们同样采用“两面写”的策略,至少是完全符合ETS的写作要求的;而且,从最一般意义上讲,“两面写”的行文策略还有如下优势:
<!--[if !supportLists]-->第一, <!--[endif]-->两面兼顾,本身即是看到了问题的复杂性(complexities),这是ETS乐意看到的思路。GRE的Issue作文对考生的思辨能力以及对复杂问题的解析能力都有很高要求,这也是为什么GRE的写作被称之为“Analytical Writing (分析性写作) ”的原因。ETS在其GRE官网上明白无误地告诉我们,GRE写作要想得5.5~6分,考生必须“Sustains insightful, in-depth analysis of complex ideas; develops and supports main points with logically compelling reasons and/or highly persuasive examples”。也就说,考生的作文必须对复杂(complex)的观点做独到(insightful)、深刻(in-depth)的分析,并且用符合逻辑的推理(logically compelling reasons)和极富有说服力的实例(highly persuasive examples)展开论证。照此要求,简单地“一边倒”的写法无疑显得幼稚些了。
<!--[if !supportLists]-->第二, <!--[endif]-->两面写,左右逢源,文章容易展开、容易写长,解决多数同学的字数难题。这是个很实际的好处。
<!--[if !supportLists]-->第三, <!--[endif]-->两面写的文章结构极好控制,若再配合得当的论证方法,则行文思路清晰、结构一目了然。常用的“两面写”的行文结构有下列三种,即:
<!--[if !supportLists]-->l <!--[endif]-->正、反、合(即:支持、反对、然后再将前面正反两方面的分析综合阐述)
<!--[if !supportLists]-->l <!--[endif]-->正、反、反(即:支持、反对、再反对)
<!--[if !supportLists]-->l <!--[endif]-->正、反、散(即:支持、反对、然后从一个更深、更广的角度将问题的阐述加以散发)
具体在文章中用哪一种结构,当然要视考生自己对题目的驾驭能力和题目本身的特点而定了。
<!--[if !supportLists]-->第四, <!--[endif]-->文章紧紧围绕着题目展开,思路集中,不易跑题(对于这一点,部分同学可能不以为然:这种小儿科的错误,怎么会在GRE考生中出现呢?但如果考生对题目的中心观点、分析的侧重点的把握出现了偏差,他就会在不知不觉中离题万里。)
既然有这些好处,我们为什么不把指引D和E也两面写呢?